Any comments on my poem?

I actually like the line "Something is formed in the taste of its own bitterness" best. I think I would spell out all the "2"s in the first stanza. Is there a way to develop the "taste" imagery more instead of using the combination of so many ideas? An extended metaphor would be nice. Like how an oyster forms a pearl, but you could combine your mirror images with it so it doesn't turn into a cliche.